I’m drowning in you
slipping the binds that hold me
hands on flesh anchor
Rhian has asked for poetry today, as she asks, I comply…
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9 comments to “Drowning In You (a wee poem)”
Nice one! Happy Poetry Monday!
I wish I could do it too
My sin is wordiness
ditto what wylie said – wordy-rhi, that’s me. that’s why i think haiku is so elegant and powerful and beyond my ability to write. hmmm – maybe we should make one of these poetry monday’s a haiku challenge?
This is great! I’m too wordy too for haiku. Novel, that I can do.
I think sex is the perfect subject for haiku. There are a million, small observations about sex that say so much.
I love novels about sex, I write em all the time. But with haiku, you can boil the subject down to a pinpoint focus. Just a breath, a gasp, a touch. I love it.
What an elegant piece — thanks for sharing it! I wish I could write haiku, but unfortunately, succinctness is not my forte. 😀
Yay! I’m having fun being part of the poetry train. Love reading all the poems. =)
Nice! I haven’t been here lately. I like the new layout! 😀